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From “Our Decrepit Food Factories” by Michael Pollan
http://www.nytimes.com/2007/12/16/magazine/16wwln-lede-t.html?_r=2&oref=slogin
The Union of Concerned Scientists estimates that at least 70 percent of the antibiotics used in America are fed to animals living on factory farms. Raising vast numbers of pigs or chickens or cattle in close and filthy confinement simply would not be possible without the routine feeding of antibiotics to keep the animals from dying of infectious diseases. That the antibiotics speed up the animals’ growth also commends their use to industrial agriculture, but the crucial fact is that without these pharmaceuticals, meat production practiced on the scale and with the intensity we practice it could not be sustained for months, let alone decades.
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The Union of Concerned Scientists estimated that about 70% of the antibiotics used in America are fed to animals living on factory farms. Raising large numbers of pigs or chicken or cattle in close and dirty confinement would not be possible without the routine feeding of these antibiotics to keep the animals from passing away from diseases. The the antibiotics speed up the growth of the animals also commends their use to industrial agriculture, but the key fact is that without these medicines, meat production on the scale and with the intensity we practice it could not be sustained for months, let alone decades.
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ReplyDeleteAccording to the Union of Concerned Scientists over 70% of antibiotics used on America is used on animals raised in factory farms. A vast number of domestic animals live in horrible and unsanitary conditions and must be fed these antibiotics in order to keep the animals healthy. These antibiotics help keep animals healthy and they help them grow faster. But, the main point is that meat production is practices on such a massive scale, that the pharmaceutical aspect of it can keep up with it for months, much less decades.
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It is estimated that over 70% of the antibiotics used in America are being used to keep domesticated animals alive. A vast number of these animals live in close quarters many of which are unsanitary. The antibiotics help enhance the rate of growth in these animals, which in turn commends their value in industrial agriculture. But, meat production is practices on such a massive scale that the pharmaceutical aspect of it can not be sustains for months, much less for years to decades. (Pollan)
The Union of Concerned Scientists believes 70 percent of antibiotics consumed in America are being given to animals on factory farms. Having a large amount of pigs or chickens or cattle in a small and dirty area would not be possible if they did not have feedings of antibiotics to keep them from dying of disease. Antibiotics also speed up growth to help industrial agriculture, but the fact is without pharmaceuticals, meat production couldn’t be maintained for months, let alone years.
ReplyDeleteIt is believed that huge quantities of antibiotics are fed too much of the agriculture in America. Due to harsh living conditions, without antibiotics, they would most likely diminish. Farmers would not be able to keep their production going without the use of these antibiotics. Disease would kill off most of their farm without the use of drugs. (Pollan)
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ReplyDeleteThe Union of Concerned Scientists estimate that almost three-quarters of antibiotics utilized in the U.S. are given to factory farm animals. The raising of animals in dirty, close conditions require the feeding of antibiotics to keep the animals alive and free of disease. These antibiotics quicken the animal's growth as well, but without them, meat production as currently practiced could not be sustained for a long period of time.
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According to the Union of Concerned Scientists, antibiotics are both widely used and necessary in current factory farming use in the United States. Although these antibiotics keep the animals healthy and speed up their growth, continued use at the current degree does not promote long-term sustainability ("Our Decrepit Food Factories", Pollen).
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ReplyDeleteThe Union of Concerned Scientists says that 70 percent of antibiotics used in America are given to animals on factory farms. Raising the numerous amounts of farm animals in filthy confinement would not be able to happen without the access to antibiotics to keep them from dying from disease. These antibiotics speed up the animal’s growth and make them able to be used in industrial agriculture. Without the pharmaceuticals, meat production practiced on this large scale would not be able to last for months.
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The Union of Concerned Scientists are concerned with the amount of antibiotics that are being used with animals on factory farms. Scientists are saying up to three fourths of all antibiotics are being used on these animals to help accelerate their growth and help fight disease. The animals on these farms are providing us with the meat that we need to be satisfied for long periods of time, this wouldn’t happen without the use of antibiotics. (Pollan)
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ReplyDeleteThe Union of Concerned Scientists says that about 70% of the antibiotics us in the U.S. are administered to animals living on factory farms. They are essential when raising large numbers of pigs, chickens, or cattle because of how filthy and close they are kept. Without these antibiotics, meat production on the scales we use it on could not continue for much longer.
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Scientific studies have recently discovered that a majority of the antibiotics both produced and administered in the United States are being used in the agricultural food industry. Specifically, these medications are being used to keep livestock healthy when living in such close quarters and a sub-par sterile environment. If this practice were banned, our current production of meat would not be able to match our consumption (Pollan).
BAD: The Union of Concerned Scientists has estimated that over 70 percent of antibiotics consumed in America have been tested on living animals in factory farms. Raising animals in such tightly closed quarters would not be possible without using antibiotics on them to keep from dying from infectious diseases. The fact that the antibiotic speeds up growth as well proves its agricultural worth, but the fact is that our meat consumption rates that we practice could not be sustained for months or decades.
ReplyDeleteGOOD (i hope): Research conducted by the UNCS has produced estimations that over 70 percent of living animals in factory farms have intentionally been fed antibiotics. Antibiotics are fed for the purposes of fighting infectious disease. The antibiotics allow the animals to live in close quarters while fighting diseases that run wild in that type of environment. The animals growth is also increased by the antibiotic, thus proving its agricultural value to the producers. Although these practices may be considered ethically and morally wrong, the fact is that Americans could not consume meat at the rate they do if were not for antibiotics.
Bad: In research it is estimated that 70 percent of antibiotics that is used in America is being fed to animals that live in a factory setting. It is said that the antibiotics actually speed up the animals growth and commends their use to industrial agriculture.
ReplyDeleteGood: According to the Union Concerned Scientist, animals that live on factory farms are being fed a significant amount of antibiotics (70 percent)that is used in America. When these antibiotics take effect to the animals change begins to happen. "The antibiotics speed up the animals' growth also commends their use to industrial agriculture" (Pollan).
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ReplyDeleteAccording to the Union of Concerned Scientists, it is estimated that 70% of antibiotics in the U.S. are used in order to feed to animals on factory farms. It would be impossible to raise pigs and chickens in such close quarters without the use of antibiotics, which help to reduce death and infectious disease in the animals. Because the antibiotics help animals to grow faster, it attributes their use in industrial agriculture. It is important to note, however, that without use of these pharmaceuticals, it wouldn't be possible to produce meet on the large scale and intensity that we do for months, and especially not decades.
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Factory farms depend on the use of antibiotics in order to raise such large volumes of pigs and chickens every year. Due to poor living conditions, the animals need to receive antibiotics in order to grow faster and stay healthy. According to the Union of Concerned Scientists, these farms use a large majority of the pharmaceuticals available in the United States, and without that use, factory farming would not be able to continue (Pollan).
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ReplyDeleteThe Union of Concerned Scientists guess that around 70% of the medicines used in The United States are given to animals raised on factory farms. Having large numbers of livestock in small and dirty places is not possible without medicines to prevent the pigs and chickens from dying of harmful illnesses. The idea that these medicines speed up the animals' growth also helps industrial agriculture, but the important ideas here is that without these medicines, meat production on this level and with this intensity could not last for months, let alone a few years.
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On factory farms, many of the animals are given various antibiotics. They are given these medicines because they are living in small and unclean spaces. Without these antibiotics, many animals would not grow as quickly, or could become sick and ultimately die. We need animals to receive these antibiotics so that we can continue to produce enough meat to fulfill our high demands. (Pollan; "Our Decrepit Food Factories")
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ReplyDeleteThe Union of Concerned Scientists estimates that at least 70 percent of the antibiotics used in America are fed to animals living farms. Raising huge numbers of pigs, chickens, or cows in close and dirty captivity would not be possible without the routine feeding of antibiotics to keep them from dying with diseases. The antibiotics quicken the animals’ growth also commends their use to industrial agriculture, but the crucial fact is that without these pharmaceuticals, meat production practiced on the scale and with the intensity we practice it could not be sustained for months or even decades.
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Scientists have discovered that the majority of antibiotics are used for farm animals. These animals are forced to take antibiotics to keep from catching diseases because the environment they are held in is to small for the amount of animals, which causes transmittable diseases. Without the intense antibiotic use on animals, the meat production would not be continual for nearly as long as the production with antibiotics.
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ReplyDeleteThe Union of Concerned Scientists have recently estimated that at least seventy percent of antibiotics used in the US are fed to animals raised on factory farms. Large numbers of pigs, chicken, and cattle, being raised in confined filthy conditions could not take place without the use of antibiotics in order to prevent death from infectious diseases. Speeding up animals’ growth with the antibiotics also commends the use in agriculture, but the fact is, without the antibiotics, large meat production and the intensity in which America practices this, could not be sustained for enough time.
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Currently, farms all around America, are currently taking advantage of antibiotics as an aid in order to prevent infectious diseases from wiping out livestock that is used in meat production. With the amount of meat production needed to sustain the countries growing needs, antibiotics have been seen to be a key component in combating the deaths of animals (such as chicken, cattle, and pigs) in close living quarters. Also, the uses of these pharmaceuticals have been seen to actually speed up the animal’s growth, so many farms are taking advantage for that reason. With 70 percent of all antibiotics used in the US, (according to The Union of Concerned Scientists), you see that this is an important practice needed in order to sustain Americans needs for meat production.
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ReplyDeleteThe Union of Concerned Scientists estimates that at least 70 percent of the antibiotics used in The United States are fed to animals on factory farms. Raising a lot of pigs or chickens or cattle in close and filthy confinement simply would not be possible without the routine feeding of antibiotics to keep the animals from dying of diseases. The antibiotics speed up the animals’ growth also commends their use to industrial agriculture, but the important fact is that without these pharmaceuticals, meat production practiced on the scale and with the intensity we practice it could not be sustained for months, let alone years.
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Scientists have discovered factory farms are increasingly using antibiotics to farm animals in The United States. Various farm animals need the antibiotics that speed up the animals’ growth to prevent diseases that can lead to death. (Pollan).
Illegitimate Paraphrase:
ReplyDeleteThere are many concerned scientists that estimate that at least 70 percent of the antibiotics used here in america, are fed to animals on factory farms. Having tons of animals, like pigs, chickens, and cattle living in close and dirty confinements simply would not be possible with out the feeding of antibiotics to keep the animals from dying of infectious diseases. These antibiotics increase the animals growth which is also why they are used in industrial agriculture. But the main point of using these pharmaceuticals is because the meat production on this scale and intensity would not be able to sustain for months, let alone decades.
“Our Decrepit Food Factories” by Michael Pollan
http://www.nytimes.com/2007/12/16/magazine/16wwln-lede-t.html?_r=2&oref=slogin
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According to the article "Our Decrepit Food Factories" many scientist believe that numerous farmers feed antibiotics to their livestock, which includes pigs, cattle, and chickens. Framers believe that since all there animals are living in such close quarters, that their survival would not be possible without the use of these antibiotics on a continual basis. Animals who are not fed antibiotics could die of many reasons including diseases. These antibiotics also effect the animals growth, causing them to grow faster, which also benefits the farmers. Knowing that these farms would not be possible without these antibiotics, many people feel to sustain a farm for a long time, they need to be used. (Michael Pollan, 2007)
“Our Decrepit Food Factories” by Michael Pollan
http://www.nytimes.com/2007/12/16/magazine/16wwln-lede-t.html?_r=2&oref=slogin
Good: Animals living on factory farms account for over 70 percent of antibiotics that are developed in the US. These estimates come from the Union of Concerned Scientists whom states that these farms that contain chickens, cattle, and pigs would not be able to function without the use of these antibiotics. One of the negative effects of these antibiotics includes increasing the animal’s growth rate. This increased growth rate is the reason that the meat production supply can keep up with the current demand.(Michael Pollan,2007)
ReplyDelete“Our Decrepit Food Factories” by Michael Pollan
http://www.nytimes.com/2007/12/16/magazine/16wwln-lede-t.html?_r=2&oref=slogin